Some people think that tennage years are the happiest part of the people's lives.others believe that adultery is better ..discuss both views and give your opinion.

There are some
people
who believe that we are happiest between 13 to 19
years
old.
On the contrary
, there are others who think adulthood is much better than the younger
years
. I would like to show both opinions and
also
state my view that I think adulthood gives us
stabler
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and more comfortable state of mind which
make
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makes
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our daily lives easier to live. The
first
merit of
teen age
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years
is its freedom from
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worldly
wordly
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worldly
responsibilities.
For example
, the average
students
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student
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of
this
age can focus on study and club activities without worrying about raising
family
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or working to support kids.
As a result
, they can spend long hours with their friends to deepen their relationships and enjoy daily
lives
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life
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together.
On the contrary
, the lack of responsibility
also
means
lack
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of independence. As most
of
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teenagers
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the teenagers
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financially depend on
parents
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their parents
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for living, they have limited free space.
Also
, they have anxiety
for
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the future which is significantly uncertain and often negatively impacts their mental conditions. They are physically young but
that is
not necessarily good, as the balance between their mind and physical demands often causes frustration. As a consequence, adolescent diseases and crimes
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occur which become serious challenges to their parents and teachers. On these points, as they grow older,
people
become stabler and easier to control themselves with the freedom they can when they become independent. In
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conclusion
conlusion
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conclusion
,
although
there are great moments in
teenage
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years
, and many
people
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nurture
nuture
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nurture
their memories from
the
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stage, I believe adulthood is more comfortable and can establish self-confidence.
People
can control
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as well as
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surrounding
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better. I personally do not want to go back to adolescence as it was quite painful,
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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