some peolpe say that the main environmental problem of our time is the loss of paticular species of plants and animals. others say thar that are more important environmental problems. discuss both views? and give your own ipnion?

In
this
present-day world, it has to be said that the
climate
problems
are because of
extinction
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the extinction
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of some flora and fauna as everything is connected by a biological cycle,
however
other
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others
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argue that other environmental issues are pivotal. There are certain
problems
such
as global warming and ozone depletion because of co2 and other toxic gases from fossil
fuel
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fuels
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, factories, and electronic appliances. The aforementioned issues may pave the way for sordid conditions like
artic
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arctic
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ice melting,
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and minimize
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minimize
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minimising
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the salinity of
sea water
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seawater
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and
this
may be a threat
for
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sea creatures.
Finally
, leads to
flood
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floods
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and
climate
change. I believe that
,
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problems
like
extinction
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the extinction
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of plants and animals as well as other issues have
consider
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considered
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to curb environmental
problems
.
Firstly
, it is an undeniable fact that plants and animals have
imperative
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role in
maintain
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maintaining
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environment
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the environment
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. By
this
I mean, many creatures
helps
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help
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in
pollination
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the pollination
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of plants. To cite an example,
dragon flies
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dragonflies
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are collection pollination powder from flowers and release it somewhere for pollination. Another instance is
Dodo
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the Dodo
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bird, it
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extinct
extincted
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extinct
years ago
used
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and used
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to help in softening a specific plant seed
in
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on
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Mauritius island for
next
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the next
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plant growth. Unfortunately, both
Dodo
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the Dodo
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bird and that specific plant
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extinct
extracted
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were extincted
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extincted
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extinct
from
earth
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the earth
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.
This
led to
climate
change
in
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the
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apply
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Mauritius Island.
However
, there are other important
problems
we have to consider
such
as global warming and ozone depletion. The
climate
is getting heat every year due to co2 and other toxic gases expulsion,
this
may pave the way for
artic
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arctic
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ice glacier melting and
decrease
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a decrease
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in
salinity
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the salinity
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of
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seawater
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sea water
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seawater
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In conclusion, it is stated that both flora and fauna extinction and other
problems
like global warming and ozone depletion are equally pivotal for
maintain
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maintaining
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our environment in its natural rhythm
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