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Q: Some people say that at all levels of education, from primary school to university, too much time is spent on learning facts and not enough on learning practical skills. Do you agree or disagree?

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with the revolution in all aspects of our world,
education
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 has been developed. some schools in several countries
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 as Indonesia and Japan, they are suggesting to their student choose, the
classes
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 they are interested in high school and university. recently, some people still believe that level of
education
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 is unchanged during the year. actually ,some institution has been developed in many ways. developing countries
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 as Indonesia provide their student with several
classes
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 that they are interested in high school,
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, catering
classes
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 for the student who like cooking, machine
classes
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 ,etc.
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,
education
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 in japan starts at kindergarten witch the teacher teaches independent
education
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 at a
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 young age.
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 that students participate to help their kitchen staff distribute lunch to their classmates.
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, not all schools have that kind of system in their curriculum,
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 students can take magang or work part-time to get some experiments. and learning new skills for their
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. in summary, students need encourage to know learning practical skills is important for their future, with that institution that
help
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 children to
prepare
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 catch their dreams
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