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Computer is becoming an essential part of education. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of computer use in education and give your own opinion.

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In the contemporary world, scientific innovations have become an indispensable part of people's lives.
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, among other useful inventions, computers are the most commendable and incredible of all, as they have played an essential role in all fields of life, especially, in education.
This
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 essay will analyze the benefits and drawbacks of using technical computers in education and qualification till my conclusion is reached.
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 with,
laptops
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 can be used for watching educational videos on the internet,
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, there are many
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 channels which teach
students
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 effectively as compared to their professors.
Students
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 can find informative videos about any topic they want to learn about.
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, there are many self-taught programmers and data analysts, who became professionals by doing online courses on their
laptops
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.
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,
this
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 machine has not only made study material available to its learners, but it has
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 taught them in the comfort of their homes. Despite all the advantages, there are a few disadvantages that cannot be ignored. Having to study or read on the laptop can put a lot of strain on the eyes and even the head. People who use
laptops
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 for most of their studies might face some health challenges.
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, there are hazardous rays emitting from the screen which are injurious to health
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.
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, I remember since the time I started using
laptops
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 for reading my syllabus, my eyesight has gotten weak and I get occasional headaches.
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, sitting in front of a screen for a long period of time can potentially cause health-related problems.
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,
although
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this
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 handy machine has made
students
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' lives easier and their learning more effective, there still should be a limit on its involvement in their field of education. In my opinion, science needs to work a long way to make
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 technology more health-friendly and safe to use, especially for
students
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.

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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that the introduction clearly introduces the topic and provides an overview of the main points to be discussed. Additionally, the conclusion should summarize the key points and provide a clear opinion on the issue.
task response
While the essay partially addresses the task by discussing the advantages and disadvantages of using computers in education, there should be a more balanced examination of both sides, including a clear opinion at the end. It is important to ensure that all aspects of the question are addressed thoroughly.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • Digital literacy
  • E-learning
  • Virtual classrooms
  • Online resources
  • Multimedia presentations
  • Automated grading systems
  • Information technology
  • Educational software
  • Cyberbullying
  • Digital divide
  • Plagiarism detection programs
  • Adaptive learning platforms
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