Some people believe that all companies’ decisions should be decided by managers, while others think that it is better to include employees in decision making. Discuss both views and give your opinion?

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straight
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between the rights of
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and
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can make
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a decision
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some
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companies
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, especially the small or middle
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company
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companies
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,
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may let their
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sit together in the meeting to make
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a decision
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different topics. Both
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have pros and cons in it. For the people who think that all companies'
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decision
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decisions
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should be decided by
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, it may
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to lead the
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to
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success. As the
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have more
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on
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the working aspect, it is easier for them to make the best
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according to their
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experience.
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, it will be clear for the
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of
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the job
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as all the
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just need to listen to one voice. It can give a clear direction for what the
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should follow.
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, for the one who
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as a manager, he or she may need to bare a high
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pressure
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failure
, the manager is the one who
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to bare all the responsibility. Other than that, not all the
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are willing to listen and follow the instruction. They may have their own point of view but not on the same line as the
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, it may cause a poor relationship between the
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and the
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. But for the
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which
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employees
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in
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making, it can help train the
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employees
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employee's
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critical thinking and their skills of
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making.
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, it can help build the confidence of the
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once their idea
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agreed
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upon by
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the
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others.
This
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shows that the
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respect
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their ideas and
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room to
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discuss
on different topics. It may build a good working
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environment
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emplyees
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employees
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less working experience than
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, it may
eaily
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cause
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failiture
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failure
.
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still need to bare the responsibility once
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teammember
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team member
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into
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. For both
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, there are pros and cons for the
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. In my opinion, I think that it will be better for the
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include
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employees
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in
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decision making
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For
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me
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, I like to express my point of view
in
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different topics. It will be better for me if I can express my point of view
in
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to
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the
company
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. So, I think it is better to include
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employees
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ideas in
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