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Some people believe that climate effects the person’s way of life while other believe that climate has greater impact on economy of a region. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In
this
 global era, global warming brings adverse effects on the
climate
 of
earth
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 across the world. It is assumed by some folks that change in
climate
 impact
life
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lifestyle
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style
 of
individual’s
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individuals
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 while others think
weather
 condition has immensely affected
economy
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the economy
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 of a country. In my point of view, the financial status of a society is greatly affected by
atmospheric
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the atmospheric
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condition
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conditions
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.
To begin
 with, in developing countries
weather
 play a vital role in
living
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the living
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style
 of people.
Societies
 wholly solely depend on environmental situations. It is to say that, people live their lives and celebrate events
such
 as spring festivals to enjoy
weather
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the weather
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.
For example
, in Pakistan residential structure, dressing, cuisine and social gatherings reflect
intensity
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the intensity
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 of
atmosphere
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the atmosphere
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 which is quite different from
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the residence
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residence
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residents
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 of European countries. So, the
climate
 not only changes the way of life but
also
 changes
dressing
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the dressing
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 and foods of
societies
.
On the other hand
,
weather
 condition
has
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greatly
influence
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 the financial structure of a nation. To be more specific, developing countries rely on agriculture which is directly affected by
weather
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the weather
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. If
environment
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the environment
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not
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does not
did not
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 dramatically change due to global warming, these nations will easily boost
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the nation
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nation
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nation's
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economy
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economies
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 by growing crops and vegetables.
For instance
, In Pakistan recently heavy rain
had
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caused a devastating flood; crops and vegetables are destroyed
at
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huge
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the huge
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sector
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sectors
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. So,
flood
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the flood
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does
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not only disturb the
agriculture
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agricultural
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 system of
country
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the country
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 but
community
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the community
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 is
also
 affected by natural disaster. In my opinion,
effects
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the effects
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 of
climate
 on
economy
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the economy
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 are more likely to
high
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be high
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 than
living
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the living
a living
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style
 of
societies
. To conclude, I tend to reiterate
although
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a persons’
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persons’
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person’s
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life
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lifestyle
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style
 is changed by
variation
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variations
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 in
climate
, the effects of
economy
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economic
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 variations seem to be more significant. In fact, I assert it has crucial impacts on
economy
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the economy
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 of
societies
.
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