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International tourism has brought enormous benefits to many places. At the same time, there is concern about its impact on local inhabitants and the environment.Do the disadvantages of international tourism outweigh the advantages?

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International
touristry
 is
one
 of the main sources of generating income for the state. It affects a
country
 in many ways. In my opinion, I believe that the advantage of international tourism outweighs the drawback.
However
,in
this
 essay, I will explore both aspects with examples. On the
one
 hand, some people believe international
touristry
 has brought enormous benefits to many
city
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cities
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. There is some thought in that. Because it brings various benefits to a
country
.
One
 of the most preponderant ones is that foreign exchange is provided to the
country
.
Thus
, there are so many countries that depend on the travel industry.
Such
 as Molduce, Italy,Spain,France,Greece and Australia.
Furthermore
,
touristry
 helps famous countries' history throughout the world.
Then
 happen some
country
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countries
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 have become world heritage. Like, in our
country
 Sigiriya. And
also
touristry
 helps
touristry
-related businesses.
Such
 as small shops situated in
famous
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the famous
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field
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fields
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, hotels, boat riders etc... And
also
 it provides so many job opportunities.
On the other hand
, critics may point out that,
one
 of the most significant drawbacks of
touristry
 is environmental pollution. Sometimes
touristry
 is the reason for polluting some action
field
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fields
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.
Such
 as putting some garbage, cultural division and air pollution ( using vehicles). There lack
of
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disadvantages to
touristry
. To sum up,
touristry
 is a good industry for countries. There is a lack of drawbacks to
touristry
. But we can find a good solution to that
problems
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problem
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. In view of the argument outlined above,
one
 can conclude that despite having some drawbacks the benefits of international
touristry
 in society are ignorable.
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