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Tourists cause more harm than good to local people and the environment. Do you agree or disagree?

#tourists #harm #people #environment
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in recent years, tourism become a growing industry, and every country has a special place for
tourists
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such
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 as Indonesia has
Bali
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. obviously, tourism helped a country in the economic sector,
nevertheless
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 as we know that some
tourists
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 have bad behaviour.
Bali
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 is the most famous island in Indonesia, every year
Bali
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 receive numerous visitor, these
tourists
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 spend their money and time in
Bali
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, which brings benefits to local
people
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. they can sell a lot of goods
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 as traditional clothes, accessories dan food. for service
Bali
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 has traditional SPA dan for transportation
tourists
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 can rent a motorbike or car.
besides
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people
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 can learn about the culture and enrich their knowledge about
Bali
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, which can bring another opportunity for to
people
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 know
Bali
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 has lots of places to explore and the goods that local
people
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 make have chances to export abroad.
on the other hand
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 bad impacts from
tourists
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 on the environment and local citizens ,for ,instance not wearing safety equipment while riding a motorbike,
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 damage spiritual places while they travel in
Bali
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. to reduce
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 kind of problems authority can give more information about how dangerous not wearing a helmet when riding a motorbike ,
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 wearing a helmet is a priority. ,
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 authorities can make a handbook for
tourists
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 when they arrive, inside the books is information about how important Pura is for local
people
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, and how
tourists
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 must give respect and maintain their behaviours when they are at
pura
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par
. and to prevent environmental damage governments can hold events to invite
tourists
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 to how to plant trees and
colar
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collar
 for marine habits. in summary, during the covid-19 ,pandemic
Bali
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 is suffering a lot,
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tourists
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 are crucial for the country and we can point out more ways to fix the problems that
tourists
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 bring and prevent the environment. I do agree
tourists
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 bring more benefit
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