The increasing prevalence of convenience food will lead to traditional method of cooking disappearing. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
Commercially prepared foods are becoming popular these days and because of
this
, some argue that home-cooked meals will be obsolete. This
essay completely disagrees with this
statement. Although
this
kind of food
saves people time, it does not taste
good and is extremely unhealthy.
To begin
with, most commercially prepared food
does not taste
good. They are often made of cheap ingredients and produced in the factory, which is why they have an unappealing taste
. Another reason is that they are made of artificial flavours in order to be affordable , therefore
they do not capture the taste
of home-cooked meals. For instance
, most mac and cheese in convenience stores tastes bland and consumers can barely taste
the cheese flavour. It does not bring the flavour and comfort of the traditional method of cooking.
In addition
to that, convenience food
is unhealthy because it has poor nutritional value. It is often full of saturated fats, preservatives, and high amounts of sodium which is bad for the body. They are very unhealthy and consuming them regularly can lead to many health problems such
as obesity, heart disease, and kidney problems. And this
can decrease the life expectancy of people. For instance
, in the Philippines, one of the reasons why most patients are undergoing dialysis is because they rely so much on this
kind of food
. Thus
, consuming them regularly can cause
detrimental effects on the body.
In conclusion, Verb problem
have
although
commercially prepared foods are time-saving for individuals, they are not delicious and they contribute to poor health. Thus
, I believe that the drawbacks associated with it are greater than its advantages.Submitted by yoko.onerom on
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