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Computers today can quickly and accurately translate languages; therefore, it is a waste of time to learn a foreign language. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays, it is generally true that
computers
 become a popular tool for the community to translate one dialect to another because it is faster and more correct than studying a language by ourselves.
Therefore
, some
people
 think that spending time learning a foreign word is not a smart activity.
However
, some
people
 argue that there are other reasons for them to exercise
languages
. In
this
 essay, I will discuss both these views and present my perspective. One of the major benefits of using
computers
 to translate sentences is that crowds who do not need to be professional speakers can travel and communicate with foreigners. Electronic devices not only translate immediately but
also
 speak the word or sentences out. Especially for elders, most of them did not study any other
languages
, they can still go abroad for a trip.
For example
, my aunt enjoys visiting Japan.
Although
 she does not speak and understand Japanese, she can still stay in Japan for several months with a packable computer.
Thus
, it is a convenient product for tourists to talk to others in other regions. In spite of the advantages, there are some drawbacks as well. One of the negative points of human beings does not study language rather than using
computers
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 translation is that electronic devices can not transfer
people
's accurate feelings.
This
 is because the computer is a robot. If folk want to make closer relationships and nice communication, they ought to speak by mouth.
Hence
, learning a language is not a lesson that wastes time, it is an ability for humans to be friendly.
To sum up
,
although
computers
 are convenient, rapid and accurate tools,
people
 should work hard to study other
languages
 for social ability.
Therefore
, I believe that
people
 should spend some time learning
languages
.
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The essay provides a relevant response to the prompt, focusing on the advantages and disadvantages of using computers to translate languages instead of learning them. However, the examples provided may need to be more specific and well-developed to fully support the points.
coherence cohesion
The introduction and conclusion are present and relevant to the topic. The essay maintains a logical structure throughout, but could benefit from more explicit signposting and smoother transitions between paragraphs.

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