n some area of the US, a ‘curfew’ is imposed, in which teenagers are not allowed to be out of doors after a particular time at night unless they are accompanied by an adult. What is your opinion on this?
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The most important reason Change the capitalization
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regulation is the impossibility of the youth, who are immature and do not distinguish between goodness and evilness,being involved in gangs. It is undeniable that the
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they can do offences freely.moreover
, spending the night out, while their parents are sleeping may cause the
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is because they are not supervised by an adult, which can temper their bad ideeas
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, in romania
, most teens prefer sleeping and skipping lessons during the day so the rate of dropping out of school in dramatically increasing.
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In addition
,lack of proper sleep can cause diffrent
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teenagers prefer walking an untrodden path.Add a comma
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