Successful sports professionals can earn a great deal more money than people in other important professions. Some people think this is fully justified while others think it is unfair Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
In the modern world ,
sports
are one of the most important factors which people
cannot ignore. Many people
are so interested in certain sports
that they want to be professional sport
Change the noun form
sports
players
. One of the reasons of
Change preposition
for
this
is that the
Correct article usage
apply
professional
are highly paid, Fix the agreement mistake
professionals
comparing
with other careers. Wrong verb form
compared
Although
some people
think that this
is not fair, they ,in my opinion, deserve high
salary because of their responsibilities, their risk ,and their Correct article usage
a high
working
duration.
Replace the word
work
Players
have to comply with several strict regimes. First
of all, they have to keep practicing
every day even on holidays ,Change the spelling
practising
such
as Christmas or New year. Moreover
, they are not free to live or visit somewhere to
which they want , for they must go to specific training or competing places that their teams decide. Change preposition
apply
Furthermore
, since they have to be always fit, they are not allowed to eat anything they want like other people
. For example
, Robinho ,the popular brasilian
football player, was charged with visiting his hometown during a training period. Correct your spelling
Brazilian
Brasilian
This
denoted how strict regimes were.
Apart from those responsibilities, professional players
are more likely to be injured than other careers. As the strength of bodies is indispensable for sports
, some players
exert their power more than bodies’
limit. Correct pronoun usage
their bodies’
Therefore
, they often stop working for a while. In addition
, some sports
,such
as football , rugby ,or basketball, frequently bring about crash
between Fix the agreement mistake
crashes
players
, making them injured more easily. For instance
, Eduado
Da Silva , Correct your spelling
Eduardo
the
Correct article usage
apply
Arsenal’s
football star, crashed with his opponent so forcefully that his leg broke. He had been cured for a year before coming back to Change noun form
Arsenal
a
field.
Most importantly , high payment is reasonable for the Correct article usage
the
professional
because their work duration is much shorter than other Fix the agreement mistake
professionals
occupation’s
. Since their bodies have limited time to work, most Change noun form
occupations
players
have an opportunity to play only
10-15 years ,which means they may not have jobs Change preposition
for only
in
the rest of their lives. Change preposition
for
Thus
, if we compare all salary
in their lives with others , it is approximately equal. Unfortunately, if some Fix the agreement mistake
salaries
players
are seriously injured , they have to quit their jobs before other players
. According to the statistics , only a tenth of professional players
can continue working in related jobs ,such
as coachs
or managers . Correct your spelling
coaches
In other words
, they tend to be unemployed after playing to some extent.
In conclusion, professional sport
Change the noun form
sports
players
deserve high payment
because they have to conform to many strict regimes , they can be injured more easily than Replace the word
pay
other
careers, and they frequently have a chance to work no more than 20 years. In my viewpoint, Change preposition
in other
high
salary is very important to Add an article
a high
sport
development. Due to high payment, more and more Wrong verb form
sports
people
will practice and develop new sport
skills, hoping to be Change the noun form
sports
parts
of these Fix the agreement mistake
part
people
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