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*Nowadays many people choose to be self-employed, rather than to work for a company or organisation. *Why might this be the case? *What could be the disadvantages of being self-employed?

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In the recent modern world, the number of young
people
 who choose to start their own businesses has been rapidly increasing. There are a couple of important reasons for
this
 phenomenon,
such
 as the advent of the internet and subsequent
society
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 structure changes.
However
, there are some critical drawbacks of self-employment. I would like to list them in
this
 essay. The most significant reason for the
above mentioned
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 trend is the introduction of the internet and the
digitizaiton
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digitisation
 of society. Owning to the
availabity
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availability
 of digital
insfrastructure
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infrastructure
 at a reasonable cost, even new graduates from universities without much investment money can relatively easily start their own
business
.
For example
, a small
venture
 company can compete with
national
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 brand if
their
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 products had a significant competitive edge in the digital market environment. The
second
 reason is the volatility of
the
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society as a whole.
For instance
, under the huge influence of the recent pandemic and the war, the market is becoming more and more unstable and many young
people
 are struggling to find good careers at large organizations. Some of these
people
 have decided to start their own
buisnesses
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businesses
instead
 of depending on established companies. These are a few most prominent reasons.
However
, becoming
self-employers
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 has its critical risks.
First
 of all, only a small percentage of
venture
 businesses
survives
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survive
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 more than three years. Once failed, the
owners
 of the
business
 not only
loose
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 income but owe a significant amount of investment borrowed from banks and stakeholders.
Moreover
, even if the
business
 continued, small
venture
captal
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capital
owners
 are constantly under the pressure to continuously grow
business
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the business
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.
For instance
, in Japan, 95% of corporations are categorized as small
business
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businesses
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 and their
owners
 tend to work seven days a week, under
the
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huge pressure and
it
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 is not good for their health. In conclusion, due to the change
of
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societal
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 structure changes, the number of
self-emplyeed
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self-employed
people
are
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is
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 continuously increasing.
On the other hand
,
a
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huge growth
of
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in
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 the
venture
business
 is a rarity and a majority of
venture
 company
owners
 are facing significant risks and pressures.
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