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some people prefer to be self-employed, whereas other like working for companies or institution. Discuss the advantages and disadvantages of both approaches which do you think is a better approach.

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There are two opposite ideas about whether
people
 prefer to
work
 for themselves or
work
 for companies or institutions.
Although
 there is good and bad in everything, in my point of view self-employment advantages outweigh
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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. On the
one
 hand, some
people
 can not think about a job
expect
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except
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 which is done for a company. Because being
self employed
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self-employed
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 and running a business is not something that everyone can do
that
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apply
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. Since a lot of
people
 do not have
this
 ability to run their business
then
 they decide to
work
 for a company because
that is
 what they are best at and gives them positive feelings.
However
, long hours of
work
 and taking orders can be boring and unpleasant to some
people
 working in countries and it could lead to their quitting
from
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work
, which is
one
 of the negative sides of working for a company.
On the other hand
, another idea is that it is better for
people
 to be self-employed. It is
specially
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 better for
indivuals
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individuals
 who need to have flexible hours because when you are self-employed, it is like you are the boss of yourself and you can do your job whenever you want.
For instance
, I have an experience
of
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working as
self-employed
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a self-employed
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 and those were the most remarkable days of my life because I could
work
 more efficiently at late
nights
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night
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 and there was no
one
 who could order me when to
work
.
Although
one
 of
disadvantages
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the disadvantages
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 that I can mention is that you become responsible for almost every aspect of your job when you are self-employed and there
ia
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is
 a huge amount of
workloads
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workload
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 that need to be done which gives
a
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huge stress
to
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on
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 a person who is working for himself. In conclusion, it is really hard to say if it is better to be self-employed or to
work
 for a country.
This
 is a choice that should be made by any individual according to their personality, habits and mood. But generally, it seems that working for each self is
more
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preferable since every individual is free to
chose
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 his or her working time.
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