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A friend you made while you were studying abroad has written to ask you for help in finding a job in a local company that might be suitable for him/her. Write a letter to this friend. In your letter • Tell your friend about the job and what sort of work it involves • Say why you think the job would be suitable for him/her • Explain how to apply for the job.

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Dear Sagar, I am doing good, hope you are doing well! I got your letter requesting guidance in finding a
job
 in
Cincinnati
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 area. I am glad to let you know that we have a relevant
job
 opportunity at my
company
 that would be suitable for you. There is an opening for
Design
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a Design
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 Engineer role at Milacron which involves
design
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the design
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 and development of Injection Molding Machines for a global market.
This
 position is within the New Product Development team at my
company
 and it requires working with
a
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3D modelling software, FEA
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analysis
 software, and ERP systems.
This
job
 requires some prior design experience within the capital machine manufacturing industry. Given your current working experience with the pharmaceutical machine manufacturing
company
 combined with your educational qualification as a master's in Mechanical Engineering, I am convinced
this
 role would be a right fit for you. I suggest you
to
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apply for
this
job
 on the
company
 website.
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 send your updated resume to the hiring manager expressing your keen interest
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 the
job
 and do not forget to include me in copy.
Moreover
, you should put my name in the referral section on the application form, I would definitely put in a recommendation for you internally with the hiring manager and our HR team. Looking forward to progressing on
this
 front. Hope to see you soon! Darshit
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