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The news media have to much influence on people's lives today and this is a negative development. To what extent, do you agree or disagree?

#news #media #influence #people #lives #development
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Nowadays, new
media
 has many effects
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daily
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 life of people and development will be
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difficulty
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than
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the same. I
personaly
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personally
 disagree that social
media
 will leads to negative development In the following paragraphs, the reason to support my disagreement will be discussed in detail.
This
media
 is a
knowlege
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knowledge
 which you can get
it
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from yourself and have
variety
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sources
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 to reach in
this
.
For instance
, if you want to know something, you can
recieve
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receive
 everything from the internet.
Moreover
, It will make a good result to develop for
environment
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 because more people can adapt to solve some
problem
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problems
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 in daily life.
Actually
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 it
take
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 a lot of
benefit
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benefits
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 to research
in
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this
.
However
, It has
a negative effects
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a negative effect
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.
Sometime
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 It will
leads
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lead
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 some people to get a bad thing that you can't remind it.
For example
, the
media
 might be over rate so that it can
becomes
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become
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danger
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media
 when you
addicted
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.
Moreover
, in daily life is
has
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more crime or corruption from
media
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the media
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.
For example
, when you buy some
facibilty
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facility
 or anything
form
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from
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 advertisement in
media
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the media
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, you will receive
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a
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product
with
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a
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bad quality. In conclusion, I personally disagree with
this
 viewpoint because it seems to me that the disadvantage
outweigh
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 the advantage.
Finally
,
Media
 will make many benefits when you know a good way to concern it and you can receive chances to do something that you never try it before.
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