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More people think that hunting animals as a sport should not be illegalized while others disagree.

#people #animals #sport
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In my opinion, I partially disagree hunting
animals
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 as a
sport
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 should not be illegalized. I will put my thoughts into words in the forthcoming On one hand, a lot of
people
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 believe that hunting
animals
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 as a
sport
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 should not be illegalized because
people
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 always think about hunting
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 and They may only
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animals
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 as a
sport
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. If they
hunting
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animals
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 jail by police officers. They think that
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 we can explain hunting
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 as a
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 and they believe that freedom.
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. I think that hunting
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very
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 dangerous because. Always hunting
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illegalized
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 in the
world
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. Hunting
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 were not introduced
in
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as a
sport
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 because hunting
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on
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very
bad
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for
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people
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.
People
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 may
evil
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. So
that
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hunting
animals
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illegalized
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was illegalized
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 and some
people
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interested
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 in rare
animals
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.
So that
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 they are going to hunt rare
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therefore
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. A lot of
animals
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 are
losing
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 nowadays. All countries try all rare
animals
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 keep in the
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. Rare
animals
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for instance
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Panda
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.
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Panda
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 very beautiful. All
people
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 want to see
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Panda
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because
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panda
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 very few in the
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. But some
people
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 try hunting
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panda
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 because all
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 like
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.
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Panda
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 always
eat
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 bamboo but it
may
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dangers
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. Always
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 afraid of
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panda
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 near go. In my conclusion, More
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 think that hunting
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 as a
sport
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 should not be illegalized in fact that hunting
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always
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 as a
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 illegalized in the
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