More and more people are using computer and electric device to access information. Therefore, there is no need for printed books, magazine and newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

It is undeniable that electric devices
such
as computers,laptops and gadgets provide the convenience to gain any information from the internet.
Therefore
, there is no necessity for traditional newspapers,magazines and books.Personally,I am in a favor of the notion and I think those advancements are more beneficial,my position is justified
further
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Firstly
,many people believe that electric gadgets like mobile phones and tablets are most required to access the info.Needless to say,there are myriad available resources to gather information anywhere and anytime,for
this
reason
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folks have switched from traditional newspapers.
For instance
,
an
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extensive research conducted by the university of
USA
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the USA
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reported that
increasing
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an increasing
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number of people
prosseded
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proceeded
to devices and they
also
added that
this
trend will flourish.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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