It is better for young people to get the advises from old people than young ones. Do you agree or disagree?

#people #ones

I agree because old

people

has

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more experience than younger. Why because they have

alot

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a lot

of experience say, his grandpa has experience

about

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cooking or hunting

the

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he gives

advice

to his grandchildren about how to hunt or

cooking

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or another example:the kid

don't

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know how to ride a bicycle but his father

know

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how to so he teaches the kid how to ride it.

Also

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generally old

peaplo

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people

know more history than younger

people

because they have experienced it . Like if his grandpa have gone through

arough

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a rough

rough

time he could

advice

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his grandchild

that is

going

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tome

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to do something that he

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to be happy or not stressed . If you

advice

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a young guy about something say about gas

how

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or how

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to avoid gas you maybe save his life you can change the world just by giving

advice

like many

prophet

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like Noah that

advice

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his

people

to pray to God but they didn't listen to him so God gave them a punishment in life and

here after

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So my point is here to

listen

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the

advice

that

people

gave to you so you will be happy and safe

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2Word repetition
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195 words

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

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Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

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Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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wisdom
insight
mentorship
holistic
innovate
generation gap
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guidance
perspectives
values
societal norms
diversity
life lessons
outdated
relevance
challenges
technological advancements
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