It is better for young people to get the advises from old people than young ones. Do you agree or disagree?

I agree because old
people
has
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more experience than younger. Why because they have
alot
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a lot
of experience say, his grandpa has experience
about
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cooking or hunting
the
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he gives
advice
to his grandchildren about how to hunt or
cooking
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or another example:the kid
don't
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won't
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know how to ride a bicycle but his father
know
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how to so he teaches the kid how to ride it.
Also
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generally old
peaplo
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people
know more history than younger
people
because they have experienced it . Like if his grandpa have gone through
arough
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a rough
rough
time he could
advice
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his grandchild
that is
going
in
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a rough
tome
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time
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to do something that he
do
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to be happy or not stressed . If you
advice
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a young guy about something say about gas
how
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or how
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to avoid gas you maybe save his life you can change the world just by giving
advice
like many
prophet
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like Noah that
advice
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advised
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his
people
to pray to God but they didn't listen to him so God gave them a punishment in life and
here after
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hereafter
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So my point is here to
listen
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the
advice
that
people
gave to you so you will be happy and safe
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • insight
  • mentorship
  • holistic
  • innovate
  • generation gap
  • revered
  • guidance
  • perspectives
  • values
  • societal norms
  • diversity
  • life lessons
  • outdated
  • relevance
  • challenges
  • technological advancements
  • creativity
  • tradition
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