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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatment instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or negative development?

#people #health #alternative #medicines #treatment #doctor #development
In
this
 modern era, an
increasingly
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 trend
happen
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 between
the
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people
solve
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 their health
isuues
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issues
 with various methods and do not follow the traditional ways. Surely, I
am not agree
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 with
this
 matter because
a lots
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a lot
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 of problems come with that and
people
 will
faced
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with
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serious
harms
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 to their bodies. It is so crucial to visit a doctor who cares
your
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 illness and you should trust
in
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experts
whose
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stuided
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studied
years
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 in the university. Using
of
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the
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information on the internet or other ordinary
people
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 comments is not a reasonable way and it could make the situation worse. Doctors usually have common protocols for each disease,
although
 small details could appear in their
soloution
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solution
 and if
people
 choose various
approachs
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approaches
approach
 it will not be efficient. Patients
also
 should visit their own doctors because they
aware
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 of their background and
this
 matter
help
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 them use
an
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and
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 ensure treatment for their illness. Specialists have
a lots
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a lot
lots
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 of investigations on
the
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medical science and new discoveries happened every day, eventhough, some of them are not reliable and
scientiest
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scientists
 should examine more to be sure about them, for
this
reason
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 it is not reasonable to follow them as their results published and
people
 should wait.
For example
: during the Corona
Virous
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Virus
Various
 pandemic some biotechnology companies released their vaccines to the market and their products do not have enough efficacy against the
virous
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various
virus
 and even in some cases, heart stroke happened,
nevertheless
, they had tons of permits
of
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 their government health organizations. In conclusion, even though some cases were
successed
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successful
 but the disadvantages overweigh the advantages.
Also
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human's
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 life is the most valuable wealth in the world and
people
 should be careful and
do
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not
threat
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 that with their wrong decisions.
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