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It is better for young people to get the advises from old people than young ones. Do you agree or disagree?

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It is beneficial for youth to receive admonishments from
elders
instead
 of their counterparts. I sincerely agreed
to
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these
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statement
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 because aged
person
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people
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 give adequate counsel in every area of our lives and I will support
this
 view with
arguements
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arguments
 in the
follwoing
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following
 paragraphs.
First
 of all, our
elders
has
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 gone through a lot of hurdles in
live
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 which makes them
to
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be in
better
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 position to get
advices
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advice
 from them. These experiences they gathered while growing up
makes
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 them to be
more
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wiser in life.
Hence
, they are in the best categories to make inputs to young
people
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 lives when they see them going astray.
For instance
, newlywed couples who are having issues managing their marriage, benefitted greatly when they seek guidance
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from
 older couples.
Furthermore
, younger
people
 can get good
contribution
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 from
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the aged
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aged
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 on how to manage their business effectively. The new generation is believed to be poor
in
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 managing resources.
People
 from the earlier generation who had witnessed what it takes to build a business, economic hardships and financial crisis
tends
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 to be more cautious when
handing
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 their resources and their spending.
Consequently
, they can use
this
 experience to guide the young ones on to keep their resources well
incase
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 of rainy days. To conclude, young
people
 can tremendously benefit from the experience of their
elders
 and must always seek their guidance before taking any major decision.
This
 essay discussed the important role that our
elders
 play in shaping our decisions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • wisdom
  • insight
  • mentorship
  • holistic
  • innovate
  • generation gap
  • revered
  • guidance
  • perspectives
  • values
  • societal norms
  • diversity
  • life lessons
  • outdated
  • relevance
  • challenges
  • technological advancements
  • creativity
  • tradition
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