In the future, more people will choose to go on holiday in their own country and not travel abroad on holiday. Do you agree or disagree??

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why I support it
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are the best of
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like traditional food and street food. that was the best for those
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state market and seafood.
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supply of knowledge and everything who allows you to learn about anything. for visiting many countries we
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about their culture and
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the tourist
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like to go on weekdays and
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choosing Overseas to travelling.
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