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In some countries online shopping is replacing shopping in stores. Do you think it is positive or negative development.

#countries #stores #development
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It is true that today more and more
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 are making their purchases online rather than visiting physical stores. It affects
people
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 in many ways. In my opinion, I believe that the disadvantages of online shopping outweigh the advantages.
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 hand, critics may point out that
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 of the most significant drawbacks of online shopping is that delivery takes longer. Because some online shops only give working days or months depending on the distance and shipping policy.
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, secure delivery service. Some items are broken during delivery,
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 as
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 made of glass, some food items and paper
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. Some of the biggest problems with online shopping are not receiving the items we ordered. Especially, clothes and shoes. Many websites show us very good quality
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, but they get fake
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. Sometimes goods are not received. As a good example,
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 day I will buy a rechargeable lamp.
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, the description sheet stated that the lamp should be charged for 24 hours. I charged for 2 days. But it doesn't work. For
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 reason, some
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 do not like online shopping.
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, there are a number of arguments in
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 of my position.
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 of the most prominent is that we can find what we like in many stores.
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, there are many online shops. So they sell different
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 of the same type. So we can find things as we want. And online shopping is very convenient for our busy life. We can buy things from home. Either we can cancel the order as soon as we want.
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,
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 online shopping can bring more benefits to
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 in modern life.
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, from my point of view, online shopping has some advantages, which cannot outweigh its disadvantages.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • unparalleled convenience
  • remote areas
  • wide range of products
  • broad selection
  • price comparison
  • customer satisfaction
  • value for money
  • impact on local businesses
  • economic diversity
  • job losses
  • environmental implications
  • packaging waste
  • carbon emissions
  • carbon footprint
  • data privacy
  • cybersecurity
  • personal data
  • tactile shopping experience
  • immediate gratification
  • physically examined
  • robust measures
  • consumer information
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