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Many people say that we have developed into a 'throw away' culture, because we are filling up our environment with so many plastic bags and rubbish that we cannot fully dispose of. To what extent do you agree with this opinion and what measures can you recommend.

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Nowadays, an increasing number of people are concerned that environmental protection.
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However
, how to preserve our environment is a controversial issue. In my view, all the parts including
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government
,
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 and
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the individual
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individual
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 could make a huge difference to change
this
 situation.
Firstly
, it is obvious that human activity
have
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 had the
greastest
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greatest
 impact on the
enviroment
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environment
.
This
 is because environmental degradation and preservation are
the
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long-term
process
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. So, whoever created the problem should solve it;
environment
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 needs
eveyone
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everyone
 of us to
continuely
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continually
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.
Moreover
, the public's wills and
behavious
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behaviours
behaviour
 have a critical influence on
govenment
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government
 policies and company strategies.
For example
, if everyone
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 no to plastic bags and undisposal rubbish, the companies that manufacture
such
 products will
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switch
 to
environmental
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environmentally
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- friendly substitutes in order to
survie
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survive
 in the market.
That is
 not to say that
govenments
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governments
 and large companies can not positively contribute. Indeed,
govenments
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governments
 can enact laws and introduce programmes to raise the public's ecological footprint awareness;
campanies
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companies
 can promote green productsits to change the public's consuming habits. But they
also
 need every citizen's appreciation and support to
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 good results. In summary, no effect is so small when we are protecting the environment. Meanwhile, local authorities, organisations and
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 must should their responsibility to develop
low
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a low
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 carbon
econmy
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economy
 at
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the mactro
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mactro
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macro
 level. Only by doing so can we assure that we will hand
this
 beautiful planet to our
next
 generation, and the
next
 generation
thereafter
.
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