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In many countries today, parents are able to choose to send their childen to single-sex schools or co-educational schools. Some people think that children going to single-sex schools have disadvantages later in life.  To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #parents #childen #schools #people #children #life
İt is argued that children should go to single-gender
schools
 or mixed-sex
schools
. Some people consider that
educating
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 in single-sex
schools
 have downsides in
children
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children's
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life
.
Although
 some opponents highlight that parents ,especially
who
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those who
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 have a
doughter
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daughter
, don't agree with the statement because of belief
stuffs
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, I strongly believe that, going to co-educational
schools
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 the
students
 later in
life
 in
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 way. On one hand, Some parents consider mixed-sex
schools
 harmful as numerous faith rules are not allowed
this
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 situation.
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In
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 early
ages
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 for pupils, having
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close contact is not welcomed
in
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 Muslims which is one of the
famous
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 religions in the world.
For example
, in Turkey, there is a school type which is called 'İmam Hatip
Schools
'. These
schools
are
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pay
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 attention
about
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these stuff
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.
Therefore
,
students
 can not
be exist
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 in the same class.
Moreover
, female
students
 are going to school in the morning,while males
in
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 the afternoon.
This
 lead to, both genders don't see each other in school.
On the other hand
,
the
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most
of
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schools
 in the world give
co-educational
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a co-educational
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 type since having
in
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a
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communication
both
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between both
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 two sex for
students
provide
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advantageous
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 for their future
life
. People have to be in touch public
regarless
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regardless
 of looking
sex
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at sex
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.
Thus
 these
schools
adapt
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adopt
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 the pupil to
the
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apply
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real
life
. Mounting evidence concerning
this
 issue suggests that person who is educated in
this
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these
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schools
 have more conversation
skiils
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skills
 compared to people who went to single-sex
schools
, leading
they
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them
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 more chance to get
job
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 in interviews or
good
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 relationship with their colleagues. In conclusion, whether parents should choose single-gender or mixed-gender
schools
 remains a controversial issue. I completely claim that going to
latter
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the latter
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 ones have more helpful
instead
of
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to
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former
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the former
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 ones as
Co educational
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schools
presents
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 more things for
self-development
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the self-development
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 of pupils.
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