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Too much Money is wasted on repairing old buildings do you think the advantages of this outweigh disadvantages .

#money #buildings #outweigh
Is it true that living in the big cities is much more convenient than in
villages
? I think that
live
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living
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 in
big
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a big
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city
 is more convenient but not useful. Today I will write
small
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a small
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 message to understand
this
 issue in more detail.
In
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first
,
big
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the big
a big
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city
 is very convent to live
.
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in.
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 All important can be near your home. You should not go to
other
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another city
other cities
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city
 to buy anything because all
magazine
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magazines
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 can be near you. Infrastructure is very developed in cities. You can go to other parts of
city
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the city
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 in half
a
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an
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 hour. There are
pharmacy
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pharmacies
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 in
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the very
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very
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every
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 district. Countries.
Villages
is
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are
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 less convenient than cities because have few magazines,
often
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and often
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have
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do have
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not
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no
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 pharmacy and schools
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, therefore,
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therefore
 you need to go to other
villages
 to study and buy all
important
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the important
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. The big
plus
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pluses
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 to
live
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living
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 in
villages
 are fresh air and nature. Infrastructure is have not
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