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Farmers within a country are often protected by tariffs - that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policies are necessary, and should be implemented wherever possible. To what extent do you agree with this?

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It is often argued by some people that
tariffs
 are essential for the protection of
farmers
 in
local
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area
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.
Although
 some people might disagree with
this
 notion,
but
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I completely agree. Not only because it is the source of government
revenue
 and forces fairer
competition
 but
also
 because it encourages domestic
production
 growth.
This
 essay will explore how these factors justify my opinion. There are multiple benefits associated with
tariffs
.
Firstly
, it is considered to be a means to acquire
revenue
by
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 the government. As if there are more imported
products
then
 local
products
 would become less popular. Take
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 example of India, where farming is considered to be a major profession that contributes to
gross
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 domestic
production
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 of the economy.
Thus
,
tariffs
 should be imposed in order to enhance
revenue
 locally.
Secondly
, apart from
generation
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 of
revenue
, restrictions
of
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 goods in the local market
encourages
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 fairer
competition
 which ultimately protects the rights of
farmers
. As imposing of
tariffs
 on imported goods creates a level playing field for the
farmers
.
For instance
, a recent article published by Oxford University
,
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 revealed that restricting
certain
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 amount of
imported
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in
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 the country enhances the chances of fair
competition
 between the countries.
Hence
,
its
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 essential to impose
tariffs
 on imported
products
.
Finally
, imposing
tariffs
 on
products
 from other countries enhances
the
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domestic
production
 growth.
As when
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revenue
 of the local market increases
this
 ultimately increases the
production
, which in turn benefits the
farmers
. To sum up, I believe that its essential to impose
tariffs
 on imported
products
 not only to generate
revenue
 and provide
a
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fair
competition
 but
also
 to support domestic
production
 growth.
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  • imported goods
  • local economy
  • buffer
  • volatile global market
  • supply chain
  • sustainable practices
  • local food production
  • environmental impact
  • trade partners
  • cost of living
  • essentials
  • innovation
  • competitiveness
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