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Farmers within a country are often protected by tariffs - that is, special taxes on imported food. Such policies are necessary, and should be implemented wherever possible. To what extent do you agree with this?

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It is often argued by some people that
tariffs
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 are essential for the protection of
farmers
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 in
local
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area
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 some people might disagree with
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 notion,
but
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I completely agree. Not only because it is the source of government
revenue
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 and forces fairer
competition
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 but
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 because it encourages domestic
production
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 growth.
This
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tariffs
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.
Firstly
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, it is considered to be a means to acquire
revenue
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by
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from
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 the government. As if there are more imported
products
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then
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 local
products
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 would become less popular. Take
an
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 example of India, where farming is considered to be a major profession that contributes to
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 domestic
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production
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product
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 of the economy.
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,
tariffs
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 should be imposed in order to enhance
revenue
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 locally.
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, apart from
generation
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the generation
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 of
revenue
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, restrictions
of
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on
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 goods in the local market
encourages
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encourage
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 fairer
competition
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 which ultimately protects the rights of
farmers
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. As imposing of
tariffs
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 on imported goods creates a level playing field for the
farmers
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.
For instance
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, a recent article published by Oxford University
,
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 revealed that restricting
certain
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 amount of
imported
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imports
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in
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 the country enhances the chances of fair
competition
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 between the countries.
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,
its
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 essential to impose
tariffs
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 on imported
products
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.
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, imposing
tariffs
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 on
products
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 from other countries enhances
the
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apply
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domestic
production
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 growth.
As when
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revenue
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 of the local market increases
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 ultimately increases the
production
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, which in turn benefits the
farmers
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. To sum up, I believe that its essential to impose
tariffs
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 on imported
products
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 not only to generate
revenue
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 and provide
a
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fair
competition
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 but
also
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 to support domestic
production
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 growth.
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  • supply chain
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  • local food production
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