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modern Lifestyles mean that many parents have little time for their children many children suffer because they do not get as much attention from their parents as children did in the past

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Nowadays the world becomes more developed than before‚ to the extent that kids start losing the connection with their family‚ and focusing on the virtual world‚ a lot of parents do not make specific date for their children .
consequently
‚ they would find difficulties to handle with them. In
this
 essay I will argue that even if life becomes busy ‚young people should not be the victim since they need the same treatment as their parents got when they were in their age. Sometimes people do not know the value of being around their children‚ especially in tough piriod. our Modern Life took them away .
for instance
: if a child has a problem in something and he wants to discuss it with his mother or father‚ they won't make time to listen to him ‚ they keep saying the common sense: I do not have time now I will talk to you later‚
this
 would destroy his emotions towards his parents‚
also
 he may think that no person cares about him anymore.
Although
 we are living with technology which almost makes us as a small family we actually forget the real .
On the other hand
‚ before many years everyone was close to each other more than now‚ the most issues that we find it in our daily life is kids do not find care between their family members they feel negligence‚
this
 would kill their feelings .
Moreover
 unless you youngesters find the someone who understand them and make them comfortably they would search about someone else even if he was bad behaved. It is better to know the importance of family ‚making excuses is not a solution. In my opinion‚ parents have to stop being neglected and start create a period of time for their children.
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