Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for tourists who visit such places?

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travelers
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all over the world opt for
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trips off the beaten track more and more often nowadays
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used to be
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of years ago.
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of journey obviously has its drawbacks.
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not it have any benefits, it would not have its popularity among
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tourists. In
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choice for a vacation. To start with, a holiday in the Gobby desert or on the top of Everest where really few people have ever been
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leaves unforgettable memories for the rest of
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life.
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, extremely difficult and every now and
then
dangerous
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boosts
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an adrenaline level tremendously which people who chose
this
type of
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find
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absolutely exciting and worth-bearing.
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conditions as extremely high or low temperature or air pressure may become critical for
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of those
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who had
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proper preparation before
such
an experience.
Furthermore
, the more dangerous the trip is the more expensive.
For example
, a friend of mine not being able to afford a trip to the Sahara Desert had to take a loan three years ago and pay it for the whole
next
year. To sum up, places with heavy conditions will always have their fans and supporters who will find difficulties rather
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benefits and a way to get unique emotions and
experience
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.
However
, all
such
people must remember about possible consequences.
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  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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