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The best way to improve health is to exercise daily. To what extent do you agree?

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The most effective method of improving
health
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 is to practice regular
exercise
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. In my opinion, I completely agree that regular
exercise
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 is the best way to improve individuals'
health
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however
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, a healthy diet is
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 considered another key factor. There is no doubt that following daily
exercises
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 will lead to improving one's
health
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.
Firstly
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, continual workout directly impacts to control of human body weight where the overweight is the key factor for most diseases.
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, weight loss will become the biggest motivation factor for the public to continue
exercise
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 who do not have dedication.
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 anybody who practices daily
exercises
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 will become very energetic and relaxed in their daily routine.
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, there is a drastic difference in the way
people
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 feel about their
life
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 when compared to the
people
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 who are doing regular
exercises
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 to the
people
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 who are doing nothing at all.
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, I believe that there is a significant impact to develop improved
health
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 if any practices regular
exercises
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 with a healthier meal.
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, if someone follows both strategies there will be a doubled chance to reduce weight which will lead to a lower risk of bad medical conditions.
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, someone can follow only a healthy diet if there are any special conditions where it will be difficult to do regular
exercises
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. Because some
people
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are suffering
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 from genetic bone problems where it is not recommended to do
exercises
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.
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, a healthy diet plan is an alternative solution for
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people
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.
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, regular
exercise
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 is the best way to develop a healthy life and ,
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additionally
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 healthy meals
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 will play a major role in it.
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coherence and cohesion
Ensure that your introduction and conclusion clearly present your opinion and summarize the key points.
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Be more explicit in addressing the prompt and providing a clear opinion. Develop your ideas in a more organized and sustained manner.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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