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The best way to improve health is to exercise daily. To what extent do you agree?

#health #exercise
The most effective method of improving
health
 is to practice regular
exercise
. In my opinion, I completely agree that regular
exercise
 is the best way to improve individuals'
health
however
, a healthy diet is
also
 considered another key factor. There is no doubt that following daily
exercises
 will lead to improving one's
health
.
Firstly
, continual workout directly impacts to control of human body weight where the overweight is the key factor for most diseases.
On the other hand
, weight loss will become the biggest motivation factor for the public to continue
exercise
 who do not have dedication.
It is clear that
 anybody who practices daily
exercises
 will become very energetic and relaxed in their daily routine.
For instance
, there is a drastic difference in the way
people
 feel about their
life
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lives
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 when compared to the
people
 who are doing regular
exercises
 to the
people
 who are doing nothing at all.
Moreover
, I believe that there is a significant impact to develop improved
health
 if any practices regular
exercises
 with a healthier meal.
Therefore
, if someone follows both strategies there will be a doubled chance to reduce weight which will lead to a lower risk of bad medical conditions.
And
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Also
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also
, someone can follow only a healthy diet if there are any special conditions where it will be difficult to do regular
exercises
. Because some
people
are suffering
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 from genetic bone problems where it is not recommended to do
exercises
.
Therefore
, a healthy diet plan is an alternative solution for
such
people
.
To conclude
, regular
exercise
 is the best way to develop a healthy life and ,
additionally
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 healthy meals
also
 will play a major role in it.
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