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Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

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In today's world, people have become more invested in their
health
 conditions and
this
 has led individuals to search
alternative
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for alternative
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methods
 to reach a healthier stage.
However
,
alternative
treatment
methods
 have not been
proved
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proven
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 by scientists yet, and only
one
's
doctor
 might arrange their prescription
truely
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truly
.
That is
 why
,
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apply
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the search
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search
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searching
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 for
alternative
methods
disarm
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 the well-being of a person. Standardised pills can be seen as not
treatful
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treating
 someone's disease and
this
 can cause finding about
alternative
 medicine
methods
. But the standardised treatments are proved by scientific authorities and they are
treatfull
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treat full
treatable
,
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 when they are prescribed by
individual's
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an individual's
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doctor
. On the
one
 hand, trying to ease pain using different
methods
 might result in worse outcomes.
For example
, if an elderly lady uses a herbal for her pain without
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a doctor
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doctor
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doctor's
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advise
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, that herbal can compound with other chemicals,n
human
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the human
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 body and result in kidney damage.
That is
 why
,
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apply
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standartised
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standardised
 medications are
proved
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proven
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 by
the
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experts and their side effects can be controlled. Every patient has their specific conditions known by their doctors.
This
 provides patients to receive
personal
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personalized
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treatment
 for their
health
 and only their
doctor
 can keep track of their
health
 records.
On the other hand
,
alternative
methods
 are not specialised for the characteristic of
the
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apply
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patience
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patient
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.
For example
, if someone with a liver disease receives an acupuncture
treatment
,
this
 causes
a
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progress in their disease. To prevent
this outcomes
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these outcomes
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,
one
 must only receive
health
service
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services
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 from their doctors.
Alternative
methods
 are harmful
for
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to
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 well-being. In conclusion, numerous
methods
 for
diseases
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disease
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 treatments have been improved over
the
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apply
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time, but only the
proved
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proven
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methods
 must be applied for physical well-being and with
supervision
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the supervision
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 of the
one
's
doctor
. From my point of view, the trend of searching for
alternative
treatment
methods
 is harmful and must be interrupted by the government.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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