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Some people think universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Education plays a vital role in a child's life as it helps them to think critically and creatively, learn about new things and help them to think logically.
Similarly
, it is thought that
universities
 should embrace the idea of equal seat distribution between boys and girls in all
subjects
. In
this
 essay, I will argue that seat distributions based on academic results are more acceptable than giving equal seats.
Firstly
, it is not practical to admit an equal number of male and female
students
. It would be hard for
universities
 to get enough admission letters for equal distribution. There are many
subjects
,
for instance
,
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Electrical Engineering subject is more complex than the rest of the
subjects
 on the list. Very few women get admitted to
this
 subject. If
universities
 applied these rules to them, the total number of
students
 would be lower in each session and they will have to wait for a long time to start a new session. Because of
this
 equal-seat policy, many talented
students
 will not get a chance to get admitted.
On the other hand
,
Students
 should have a chance to get admitted to
universities
 based on their academic results. If more women than a man can achieve a better score they should have priorities in a specific subject.
This
 will help them to learn about their favourite
subjects
 and after education,
as a result
, they will be able to work in the field based on the
subjects
 they studied. To conclude, reserving university seats based on gender is unwise, it may dilute the quality of education by letting undeserving
students
 in and preventing deserving
students
 from securing admissions.
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