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Some people believe that starting school at an earlier age is very beneficial for children, while others believe that children must stay home and attend school at the age of 7. In your opinion, what are the advantages of attending school before the age of 7

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In recent years more and more individuals consider that commencing
school
 at an
Early
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age
 is really constructive for minors but nobody would dispute the fact that
children
 must dwell home and go to
school
 at the
age
 of 7. In my
opinion
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children
 should acquire an education
in
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their
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 early
age
. I will put my thoughts in the word in the forthcoming paragraphs. Nowadays common opinions in society show that most parents always support the fact
children
 should attend
school
 at the
age
 of 7. Because they might be tired and their brain can not accept more information.
Moreover
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 they are bad at reading thinking or calculating regularly. They feel awkward themselves among other students.
On the other hand
 in my opinion young minors should go to
school
 in their early time. Because they will achieve everything in advance.
Firstly
 they may have got a lot of abilities and they can
adminster
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administer
 everything. To me even though they will struggle they have to do them
in
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later
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 time they tend to perform
theses
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. They will catch up with
another friends
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 if they make an effort. In
conclusion
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 most people think that our
children
 go to
school
 at the
age
 of 7 but in my
opinion
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 they attend
school
 earlier
however
 they are really young or weak
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