Some people believe that starting school at an earlier age is very beneficial for children, while others believe that children must stay home and attend school at the age of 7. In your opinion, what are the advantages of attending school before the age of 7

In recent years more and more individuals consider that commencing
school
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age
is really constructive for minors but nobody would dispute the fact that
children
must dwell home and go to
school
at the
age
of 7. In my
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children
should acquire an education
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their
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early
age
. I will put my thoughts in the word in the forthcoming paragraphs. Nowadays common opinions in society show that most parents always support the fact
children
should attend
school
at the
age
of 7. Because they might be tired and their brain can not accept more information.
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they are bad at reading thinking or calculating regularly. They feel awkward themselves among other students.
On the other hand
in my opinion young minors should go to
school
in their early time. Because they will achieve everything in advance.
Firstly
they may have got a lot of abilities and they can
adminster
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administer
everything. To me even though they will struggle they have to do them
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later
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time they tend to perform
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. They will catch up with
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if they make an effort. In
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most people think that our
children
go to
school
at the
age
of 7 but in my
opinion
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they attend
school
earlier
however
they are really young or weak
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