Many parts of the world are losing important natural resources such as forests animals or clean water What's your opinion.

Nowadays more and more individuals in many countries are not regulating important natural resources
such
as
forests
animals
or clean
water
. In my
opinion
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we should avoid these losings.I will put my thoughts into words in the forthcoming paragraphs. Now many
people
consume
water
animals
in
useless
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.
Firstly
they hunt many fruitful
animals
and chop many
plants
.
For example
rabbits
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some birds are not for eating. In some
countries
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most
people
have shortages of
water
but
many
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countries
persons
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have wasting
water
in
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. They utilize
plants
,
water
, and
forests
for abominable ways
such
as collecting . These examples are really deplorable for our nature. Most
people
think that many
animals
are need not for our Life.
Moreover
they can bite us or harm our skin
such
as wild
animals
. Common opinions in society show that we apply
in
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pure drink for our Life even though our necessities
such
as washing . Nobody would dispute the fact that we can dwell without
Forests
and some
plants
. In
conclusion
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many
people
consider that we can reside without
plants
,
forests
,and
animals
and
also
consume them in
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. In my
opinion
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everyone should spend them in an
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accurate
accurative
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for protecting our nature
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