Write a letter to a colleague who is hospitalized at the moment. 'Ask about his/her health 'Let him/her know what changes occurred since he/she has been hospitalized 'Also try to make him/her happy in some ways.

Dear or Madam I am the deputy manager of the company. I am writing

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to ask about your health. Sorry, I should have informed you earlier. But I did not have time. How are you? Are you sick anywhere? You are much better than before. Your

colors

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are

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very white before. You were very tired. You could not do much. You are much better now. Your

colors

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are spot on too. You do not get tired right away. Yes, your health is much better. We are very much looking forward to seeing you. My colleagues and I miss you very much. Come

quicly

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quickly

we have news for you. If you come sooner, you will be fine. Thank you for your

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attention

attantion

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attention

Your faithfully. Jòrayeva Shahlo

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task response

Ensure that the response fully addresses the task requirements, including asking about the colleague's health, informing them of changes, and attempting to uplift their spirits.

coherence and cohesion

The logical structure of the letter lacks coherence and cohesion, leading to a disjointed and unclear flow of ideas. Consider organizing the content in a more coherent and structured manner.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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1Linking words
meeting the goal of 7 or more
0Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
7Grammar mistakes
 

7 paragraphs

128 words

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 5.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 5.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

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Topic Vocabulary:

hospitalized
well-being
updates
developments
lighthearted
assistance
gossip
isolated
eagerness
colleagues
well wishes
recuperation
morale
empathy
reassurance

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Write a letter to a colleague who is hospitalized at the moment. 'Ask about his/her health 'Let him/her know what changes occurred since he/she has been hospitalized 'Also try to make him/her happy in some ways.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Essentional vocabulary list for IELTS Writing 7+

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