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Many people are choosing to move to cities. Why is this happening? Do the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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Population in town space increase gradually because most people are willing to choose
city
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 life rather than living in the countryside with the natural environment and fresh air. There are more advantageous aspects than disadvantages of
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 trend.
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 essay will discuss in detail the possible reasons for that and provide some supportive information to the argument. To commence with, the community try to gather around urban space mainly because of
facilities
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 of various aspects
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 as high standard schools, hospital
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 consisting of modern technology, modern shopping centres, leisure areas for children, etc.
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, if a person engages in a job in a
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 the better way is to move to that
city
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 with his whole family
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 of travelling from the countryside daily.
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, he will benefit from all other aforementioned
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 at the same time of moving.
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 when he got a transfer to a location far away from the
city
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 he do not try to move again because of these
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.
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, there are several advantages of living in an urban area personally as well as socially.
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, the government can provide basic needs easily when people gather around a limited area
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 as transportation, healthcare, sanitary, education, electricity, etc.
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, deforestation is minimized due to less density of human beings in the countryside and it is easy to preserve forest areas.
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 but not least, there are lots of benefits can gain individually.
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, the disadvantages of increasing the population in urban areas are negligible when comparing the benefits. To conclude, people tend to live in cities basically due to convenience.
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, there is a considerable surplus comparing its drawbacks.

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