Some people believe that people today have no interest in maintaining the traditional culture of their country or region. Others believe that it is still important to people that we preserve a traditional way of life. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

Nowadays some individuals believe that traditional
culture
such
as country
culture
is no longer interesting, while others believe that it should be preserved.
This
essay will examine both sides of
this
controversy and I strongly believe that not every
culture
should be preserved. On the one hand, remaining in all traditional
cultures
is unnecessary because some
cultures
limit
people
's freedom. To be more specific, some
cultures
have strong restrictions on clothes and gender choices.
For example
, in Islamic
culture
, women need to wear proper long dresses to almost cover their bodies and
people
can not choose their gender and sexual preference
such
as gay or lesbian.
On the other hand
,
people
should still follow the traditional
culture
to preserve it.
To begin
with, there is a good intention behind the
culture
.
For example
, in Thai
culture
,
people
usually visit their parents on Thai New Year's day to pay respect.
Moreover
, some traditional
cultures
can attract tourists to travel to the country to bring more revenue to the country.
For example
, many tourists from all around the world come to Thailand for Songkran Festival to attend the water splash festival. Overall, it is still important to preserve the local
culture
as there is a good reason behind the
culture
and it can convert the local places into tourist attractions, increasing revenue.
However
, not all
cultures
should be preserved as some limit individual freedom of expression each individual. With all reasons taken into account, I strongly believe that
people
should have the right to select which
culture
they want to follow.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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