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MORE AND MORE PEOPLE TODAY ARE VISITING EXTREME PLACES SUCH AS ANTARCTICA OR THE SAHARA DESERT. WHAT ARE THE ADVANTAGES OR DISADVANTAGES OF SUCH TRAVELS?

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It is an undeniable fact that nowadays a number of individuals love to explore and visit different zone according to their taste.
However
, visiting extreme areas improves personal growth and travellers understand the value of different traditions and recreational activities. In
this
 essay, I will discuss the merits and demerits of the given statement. In
this
 modern era, a number of foreigners travel across the world and gain a lot of information about a particular place. There are a number of advantages to visiting various tourist fields
such
 as deserts, mountains, oceans and so on.
Firstly
, people can easily improve their knowledge of several languages and learn the usefulness of several traditions, products, monuments and many more. To illustrate
this
, nowadays foreigners visit different monuments located in India and from
this
 Indians easily communicate with them and decrease their understanding of linguistic issues, tourist guide people to earn money, which is good for employment
also
.
On the other hand
, there are some drawbacks
also
.
Firstly
, visiting different spots is good to learn about the emphasis of location, but somewhere it is harmful for the particular location and nation.
Secondly
, people do not dump waste material in a proper dustbin and from
this
 incident a particular place or any water bodies are infected by different diseases, which is very bad for ocean animals. Agglomerating all points above elaborated, I opine that there are more advantages as compared to disadvantages
,
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 because visiting several areas is good to enjoy your own time with family and friends.
However
, the public cannot understand the importance of oceans, deserts, and mountains and they have to secure the place from waste.
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