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Explain some of the ways in which humans are damaging the environment. What can governments do to address these problems? What can individual people do?

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The bar chart provides a comparison of the annual amounts of
rice
 produced in 4 different countries in three
separated
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 years 1995, 2005, and 2015. From an overall perspective, Countries A and
B
 were two big
rice
 producers during the years shown while the amounts of
rice
 produced by countries C and D were relatively low.
Additionally
,
country
 A saw a gradual increase in
rice
 production over the
period
 shown while
country
B
 witnessed a marginal fluctuation. At the beginning of the
period
, the
rice
 production of
country
 A was highest, at 45
million
tonnes
, followed by
country
B
, at 37
million
tonnes
. The amount of
rice
 produced by
country
 C was much lower, at 5
million
tonnes
. The figure for
country
 D was
lowest
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, at just 1
million
ton
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tons
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. From 1995 to 2015
period
,
country
 A witnessed a steadily increasing tendency in
the
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annual
rice
 production, to 50
million
tonnes
 while the amount of
rice
 produced by
country
B
 dropped to 41
million
tonnes
 after a significant rise in 2005. the figure for
country
 C remained relatively stable over the same 20-year
period
.
By contrast
, a noticeable increase of 1
million
tone
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tones
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 could be observed in the amount of
rice
 produced by
company
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Company
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 D.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Pollution: contamination, emissions, pollutants, industrial waste
  • Deforestation: habitat loss, biodiversity, urban development, logging
  • Climate Change: greenhouse gases, global warming, fossil fuels, renewable energy
  • Overfishing: unsustainable, fish stocks, marine ecosystems, conservation
  • Waste Production: non-biodegradable, plastics, recycling, waste management systems
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