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There seems to be an increasing number of serious crimes committed each year.While some think the best way is to use the death penalty as a deterrent, ,many believe that other meausres will be needed. Discuss both sides.

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The table compares the value of a single
coffee
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 cup in 6 different cities from 2010 to 2014 in Australia. Overall, the
price
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 of
coffee
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 in Sydney was higher than in other countries.
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, the
price
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 of a cup of
coffee
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 in Melbourne had the most remarkable rise over time.
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, it cost 2.8
dollars
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 for a
coffee
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 drink in Sydney in 2010, and increased by 13.2% in the
next
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 4 years Melbourne, placed
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 highest for the
coffee
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price
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 in both years, had the most noticeable change of 20.8%, raised to 2.9
dollars
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. Brisbane sold 2.25
dollars
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 for a cup of
coffee
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 and was the only city with no
price
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 rise. Since 2010, Perth had increased its
price
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 by 7.1%, slightly higher than the change in Adelaide. While people in Perth paid 2.25 per
coffee
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 drink, Adelaide citizens paid 0.25
dollars
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 less in 2014. During the same period, the cheapest place to get
coffee
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 was Canberra, at the
price
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 of only 1.6
dollars
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 and 1 dollar higher in 2014.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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