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At the present time, the population of some countries includes a relatively large number of young adults, compared with the number of older people. Do the advantages of this situation outweigh the disadvantages?

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Nowadays,
population
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the population
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 of
few
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a few
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 countries in terms of younger
people
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 is huge as compared with older individuals.
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 my
standpoint
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 it will surely outweigh
it's
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 demerits. So, in the forthcoming
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 I have mentioned both its merits and demerits. On the one hand, younger
people
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 are more work efficient and hardworking. These qualities of younger individuals can be extremely beneficial for the
country
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's
growth
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, due to
this
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 GDP
growth
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 of the
country
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 will boom like never before. Young
persons
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people
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 can work for longer
period
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periods
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 of yours throughout the day, whereas older
people
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 cannot.
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, younger
people
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 play a vital role
for
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in
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 the
country
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's
growth
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.
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,
people
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 who are young in age have a spark in them to make new innovations that can be beneficial for everyone.
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,
young
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the young
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individual
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individuals
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 will try to invent
a
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an
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 andro-humanoid robot which is extremely difficult to make and launch
it
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in the market.
Younger
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The younger
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 generation would love to experiment
various
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with various
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 things with science and technology.
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, younger
people
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 are like
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an asset
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asset
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assets
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 to the
country
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.
On the other hand
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, older
people
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 have
a
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apply
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significance in
the
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society
like
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because
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 they have more experience as compared to
younger
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the younger
a younger
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 generation, in terms of topics like handling relationships, rituals, social importance and
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.
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, older
people
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 are
more calm
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 in nature, whereas younger person gets hyper even at small things.
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, older individuals can not be neglected fully as compared to young
people
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. To conclude, older
people
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 play an important role in
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society, whereas younger
people
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 can be
crucial
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a crucial
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 part
for
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of
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 a
country
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's
growth
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 and all kind of development even in the nation's GDP
growth
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.

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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • demographic
  • workforce
  • productivity
  • innovation
  • skilled labor
  • social development
  • technology
  • dividend
  • competition
  • resources
  • social welfare
  • unrest
  • instability
  • healthcare
  • elderly care
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