people now a days work hard to buy more things. this had made our life more comfortable but it is a pity many tradition values have been lost on the way to such materialism.to what extenet do you agree or disagree with the statement.
It is an
undeiable
fact that each and every Correct your spelling
undeniable
pupils
love to buy new Change to a singular noun
pupil
things
for their kith an
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and
kins
and they love to decorate their house with their own idea and it is not wrong to say that it has become easy to buy new Fix the agreement mistake
kin
things
with help of funds in blink
of eyes Add an article
the blink
a blink
whilts
some individuals Correct your spelling
whilst
thinks
that in search of new Change the verb form
think
things
we have forgotten our ancient things
in our daily life . In fact , I completely disagree with the first
statement and I would like to give views and opinion
in the Fix the agreement mistake
opinions
further
essay .
Firstly
, buying various product has become trend
in Add an article
a trend
the trend
whole
world and every Change the article
the whole
persons
like to give gifts and surprise Change to a singular noun
person
to
their family member Change preposition
apply
with
buying new products . Change preposition
by
Furthermore
, it also
help
human beings to give proactive look Change the verb form
helps
in
society as well . Change preposition
at
In Addition
, in this
21st century
ample Add a comma
,century
of
sites have been Change preposition
apply
runied
by Correct your spelling
ruined
people
to help mankind to give their things
in easy
way with help of online marketing and online delivery as well as Change the article
an easy
man
/woman can buy their needy Fix the agreement mistake
men
things
in
online websites . Change preposition
on
Nonetheless
, rule maker
Fix the agreement mistake
makers
also
help
beings to buy Change the verb form
helps
vareites
of Correct your spelling
varieties
variety
household
system as it Add an article
the household
do
not only help to get GPD at peak but Change the verb form
does
it
Correct pronoun usage
apply
aslo
Correct your spelling
also
make
Change the verb form
makes
least
unemployment . Change the article
the least
For Instance
, India has made work from home
site for peoples who are mentally and physically disabled so can get daily income to run their house and Add an article
the home
Goverment
Correct your spelling
Government
also
provide free edduaction
to Correct your spelling
education
the
poor Correct article usage
apply
people
children so they can get Change noun form
people's
myraid
of ideas from Correct your spelling
myriad
students
work .
Change noun form
students'
student's
However
we seldom give a thought to ponder over Correct article usage
the other
other
side of the essay , Change the wording
another
trational
Correct your spelling
traditional
irrational
things
plays
Change the verb form
play
paraamount
role in Correct your spelling
paramount
every one
life . Replace the word
everyone
Moreover
, we can get plethora
of ideas from ancient monuments and it Add an article
a plethora
also
help
us to increase our immunity system . Change the verb form
helps
Additionally
, pupils these days run after comfortable outcomes and forgot about a long ago
object and they do not have Add a hyphen
long-ago
idea
about how ancient Add an article
an idea
people
lived in that specific era . Last
but not the least , in todays
world kind work hard to Correct your spelling
today's
peotect
their family members and they forgot about their old age person and they Correct your spelling
protect
says
new items Change the verb form
say
has
Change the verb form
have
salient
role in their living life . To Cite an Example , As per Add an article
a salient
latest
article published in "THE HUFFINGTON POST " 90% of foreign Add an article
a latest
the latest
people
keep their parents to live outside also
10% of them say there
birth given to live in Correct your spelling
their
orphanege
.
In Conclusion , living old items Correct your spelling
orphanage
orphanages
beside
is not good for our community and society Change preposition
apply
also
it's wrong to leave biological parents behind . Lastly
, it is good to buy new things
but not to avoid 2000 year ago system.Submitted by Niv on
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