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In some countries, the government is encouraging business and industries to move outside city center and relocate to regional areas. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this trend?

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Nowadays,
although
 most countries locate business and industrial functions in a central
area
, some spread them outside of the city. It is undeniable that it has good and bad points, and I will discuss both of them in
this
 essay.
Firstly
, putting jobs outside of a city brings many opportunities and advantages to the local people,
such
 as job opportunities.
As a result
, it is foreseeable that that
area
 will be developed instantly, and the population of those cities will be increased.
As a result
, it will improve the economy
,
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 and health care service of the rural
area
. When we think of the central
area
such
 as Tokyo in Japan, it is
also
 beneficial to have core business functions in those central cities.
For instance
, house rent will be reduced so that citizens can save money.
Moreover
, roads and trains will be less busy, and it will level up people's
quality
 of life and improve the
quality
 of air.
On the other hand
, the severe drawback of spreading the main
area
 apart will reduce in-person networking opportunities due to the distance problem.
Moreover
, for that countryside in which the air is clean, as modernization grow, it will bring environmental problem caused by modernization. Overall, in the current era, setting core functions away from the central brings both good and bad results. A good thing would be that the local
area
 can be industrialized and improve the economy and healthcare, and people's
quality
 of life could be improved by better air
quality
 and less stress. Bad thing is that it reduces social chances and
also
 it brings environmental problems.
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