The percentage of obese children in Vietnam has been increasing in recent years. What are the causes and effects of this disturbing trend?

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The chart illustrates the process of making

sugar

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from

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cane. From an overall perspective, producing the suger

need

Correct subject-verb agreement

needs

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to go through 7 steps, which include growing to dry. Looking at the diagram in more detail,

first

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, the plants would have a growing season that lasts 12 to 18 months.

Second

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sugar

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cane will harvest by hand or by machines.

However

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, it is evident that using machines is more effective.

Third

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, we can see the vegetation pressed into juice, which is easier to do in the

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step. Using the limestone filter to purify juice. After getting the essence of the material, started to use heat to cook the juice and let it becomes syrup. Almost finished, the step of the centrifuge is to separate

sugar

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crystals from the syrup. At

last

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, after drying and cooling it will become the material we add to the sweet desserts. We could see

this

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manufacturing process, which is a natural way to make

sugar

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without adding any additives

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

Summary
Restatement of thesis
Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

In conclusion
To conclude
To summarize
Finally
In a nutshell
In general

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meeting the goal of 7 or more
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Word repetition
meeting the goal of 3 or fewer
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Grammar mistakes
detected issues

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 8.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 6.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

2 paragraphs

165 words

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The percentage of obese children in Vietnam has been increasing in recent years. What are the causes and effects of this disturbing trend?

Include an introduction and conclusion

Some people think that teenagers should follow the old generation but others believe that they sould challenge the old thoughts. Discuss both view and give your opinion.

There is a notion that says developed countries should avoid encouraging expert workers of developing countries for emigration, because the poorer countries need their professional workers

People nowdays send than talk on text messages more frequently the Phone What are the reasons for this trend? Do the advantages of texting outweigh the disadvantages?