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In the past lectures were the traditional method of teaching large numbers of students. Nowadays new technology is increasingly being used to teach students. What are the advantages and disadvantages of this new approach.

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Nowadays, new inventions are widely used in many spheres of life
such
 as studying and teaching, compared to more traditional
methods
 of studying in the past. Since the world is changing
everyday
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, new
technologies
 help humanity with giving and taking
high quality
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information
 clearly and comfortably.
However
, it might have a negative impact on the health of pupils. There are two main benefits of using
technologies
 in studies.
First
 of all,
technologies
 provide access to educational resources and give freshmen the opportunity to take
information
 in
understandable
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 form without any unnecessary materials.Students can search for
information
 that they need on educational platforms
such
 as Edvibe, Lynda, Skillshare etc. While lectures take more
time
 to listen to, the new
methods
 of studying with platforms
allows
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 faster and the same comprehensible
information
. Pupils could use new
technologies
 for both main and additional sources of
information
.
Secondly
, it creates a more
engaged
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 environment. It could encourage active participation in the classroom. Using devices
such
 as computers, tablets, smartphones etc could turn traditional subjects into interactive activities.
On the other hand
, using advanced
methods
 of studying with the help of new gadgets most of the
time
 could have a poor influence on
well being
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.
Firstly
, it is believed that using new devices
such
 as laptops, smartphones and others on a daily basis
are
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 more likely to have deleterious effects on health. Most of the
time
, apprentices are diagnosed with astigmatism, myopia, scoliosis and more. The main cause of problems with health is spending a lot of
time
 on gadgets. New
methods
 of studying help to get
information
 in an accessible format. Gain knowledge in an interesting and useful environment using new
technologies
.
Nevertheless
, new inventions might have harmful consequences on students.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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