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some people think that parents should teach children how to be good members of society. Others, however, believe that school is the place to learn this.

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It is sometimes argued that minors should be taught by
parents
 rather than
school
 so as to be good members of society. Personally, I think that
parents
 and
school
 duties overlap each other and there is no contrast and it is a completely wrong perception. My reasons will be explained in
this
 essay. The role of the
parents
 before enrolling in schools is very significant and can not be neglected. All the
children
 have been brought up by their
parents
 before registering in the schools; It means that the
children
 spend a lot of time with them and learn and imitate everything
such
 as speaking and eating and social skills from their
parents
. So It is important that the
parents
 can show their good attributes in the family atmosphere.
besides
, the
school
 can provide practical space for
children
 to show their abilities. A
School
 is a small scale of a big society where they take some responsibilities and learn to be responsible for their actions through hands-on experiences and proficient teachers and develop beside the other peers.
For example
, playing sports can increasingly boast teamwork morale and encourage them to be active participants in the team. To sum up, both
parents
 and
school
 help the
children
 to create and develop their behaviours and characters.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • good members of society
  • teach
  • parents
  • schools
  • responsibility
  • values
  • respect
  • empathy
  • responsibility
  • formal education
  • citizenship
  • ethics
  • social responsibility
  • lead by example
  • role models
  • conducive environment
  • extracurricular activities
  • community involvement
  • collaborate
  • holistic approach
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