"It is sometimes argued that too many students go to university, while others claim that a university education should be a universal right. Discuss both sides of the argument and give your own opinion

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of people in

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era who argue that more and more students are studying at university. While others context that , it is the fundamental right of youngsters. I believe that it is necessary to attend college

education

to attain a great amount of knowledge . I am going elaborate in detail in the following paragraphs. Admittedly there are some peoples who believe that secondary

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is sufficient to get employment,

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they contest that university is attracting men and women. as per the

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purpose of culture is to earn a living hood, once they avail the required skill stop pursuing

further

education

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in

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conducted in India on employees who work on their lower

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expressed

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that their motive is to get

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to get stable life and

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they felt if they continue their

further

studies they would have get

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position in the same place where they working for.

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I certainly argue that higher

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is most important to get good employment. In

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sophisticated era graduation is not only necessary but

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right for every individual. Every

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economy mainly depends on

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young youth if they

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attend

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university

how we can expect professionals in

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society

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government

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should support poor children who could not offer

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higher

education

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consequently

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in return they contribute to

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society,

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shall

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become prosperous in all filed.

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relationship between higher

education

and

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economy In ,Conclusion

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people that secondary

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for

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I believe that

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it is

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right of every citizen of the country to get high skills to compete with the rest of the world