Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion
In
this
modern era have two kinds of people
. One charitable of public
thinks that Correct article usage
the public
accept
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accepting
difficult
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a difficult
position
like Fix the agreement mistake
positions
an
unhappy jobs or financial crisesCorrect the article-noun agreement
apply
.
Another Add a missing verb
is.
kind
of public believes that finding a way to enhance the difficult moment of life
is nessecry. I strongly confide that everyone has to develop their won-self through hard work
.
perhaps, accept
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accepting
bad
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a bad
situation
is perfect for numerous Fix the agreement mistake
situations
people
, who are less ambitious about their future life
. if anyone wants lieve
their Correct your spelling
live
life
as
an average way like middle or lower level, Change preposition
in
then
this
person
can manage their commodity in any way such
as from unsatisfied
job. I think not only that, Correct article usage
an unsatisfied
this
kind
of people
are ok with their earning amount and the source of money, though this
is from unsatisfied work
field and also
they are happy with their regular need. Hence
, the main goal of these people
is spent
their Change the verb form
has spent
life
as normal
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a normal
person
, after all from my perspective it always relies on own choice of every Fix the agreement mistake
people
person
. Also
some Add a comma
,Also
people
are not adaptable to every job and they are not will be a
better personnel. So, Remove the article
apply
this
is not wrong to accept the bad situations in life
.
However
, everyone also
can enhance their own fortune if they try it painstakingly. It is obvious people
can alter the bad circumstance of life
by doing hard work
for a shiny future. I believe that when we will retire from our work
after middle age, after that we can be the happiest ones in our society and we can be a
successful Correct article usage
apply
person
. Fix the agreement mistake
people
People
have to improve their life
for the satisfaction of life
and it is more impressive than leading bad life
like crises in finance or doing a job which is not much satisfactable.
In conclusion, I think it is better to develop a situation than lead
bad Add an article
a lead
life
. And is all up to us, because we can devote ourselves in two ways like what kind
of person
we are or what kind
of life
we want.
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