Some people believe that it is best to accept a bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. Others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion

In
this
modern era have two kinds of
people
. One charitable of
public
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thinks that
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difficult
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position
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like
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unhappy jobs or financial crises
.
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Another
kind
of public believes that finding a way to enhance the difficult moment of
life
is nessecry. I strongly confide that everyone has to develop their won-self through hard
work
. perhaps,
accept
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bad
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situation
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is perfect for numerous
people
, who are less ambitious about their future
life
. if anyone wants
lieve
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live
their
life
as
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an average way like middle or lower level,
then
this
person
can manage their commodity in any way
such
as from
unsatisfied
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job. I think not only that,
this
kind
of
people
are ok with their earning amount and the source of money, though
this
is from unsatisfied
work
field and
also
they are happy with their regular need.
Hence
, the main goal of these
people
is spent
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their
life
as
normal
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person
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, after all from my perspective it always relies on own choice of every
person
.
Also
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some
people
are not adaptable to every job and they are not will be
a
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better personnel. So,
this
is not wrong to accept the bad situations in
life
.
However
, everyone
also
can enhance their own fortune if they try it painstakingly. It is obvious
people
can alter the bad circumstance of
life
by doing hard
work
for a shiny future. I believe that when we will retire from our
work
after middle age, after that we can be the happiest ones in our society and we can be
a
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successful
person
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.
People
have to improve their
life
for the satisfaction of
life
and it is more impressive than leading bad
life
like crises in finance or doing a job which is not much satisfactable. In conclusion, I think it is better to develop a situation than
lead
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bad
life
. And is all up to us, because we can devote ourselves in two ways like what
kind
of
person
we are or what
kind
of
life
we want
.
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