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Many believe that success in life mainly depends on hard work and determination while others believe that factors like money and personal appearance are important. Discuss both views and give your opinion

#success #life #work #determination #factors #money #appearance
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Pie charts illustrate
movie
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genres
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 preferences in the two largest countries of Asia,
China
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 and
Japan
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. In
China
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 the most popular
movie
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 genres are romance and action, both account for 30%. Every fourth Chinese
likes
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like
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 to watch comedies and only
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one tenth
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 would buy a cinema ticket to watch a drama
movie
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. Sci-fi is the least popular
genre
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 in
China
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 as well as in
Japan
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, only
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one twentieth
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 of the respondents in these two countries define
this
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genre
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 as their favourite. In
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Japan
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,Japan
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the
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comedy is
equal
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equally
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 unpopular as
the
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sci-fi, only 5% of Japanese keen on these two types of movies. Romance is
also
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 not the
genre
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 that people in
Japan
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 prefer, that figure is higher than comedy and sci-fi by only 3%. The
second
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 place in
the
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Japanese preference takes drama, every fourth
one
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 enjoys
this
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genre
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.
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, there are over
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one half
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 of Japanese respondents are action fans. In conclusion, action movies are the most popular in both countries, and there are not so many fans of
sci-fi
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a sci-fi
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movie
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movies
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 in
China
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 and
Japan
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.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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