Some people say that music is a good way of bringing people of different cultures and ages together. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?
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life. Numerous Correct article usage
the community's
people
confide that music
is one
of the significant facts, which can congregate the public from different cultures and different ages
. I believe that there has plenty of ways to get people
together than singing.
Perhaps, in our ,society everyone has a variety of interests. In order to my opinion have a lot of people
surrounding us, who do not use to to listen
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tolisten
music
, because they are actually not interested in listening to music
. If any person can not relate to his or herself overseas music
, then
how can a person comes into a society, which manifests one
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arts
ages
of community
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the community
.
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For instance
, If a
Bangladeshi Correct article usage
apply
people
do not have the ability to understand a piece of music
, which is produced by a Chinese composer, because a foreign person is not able to get unknown music
or song.
Furthermore
, not only the reason for foreign music
, there have more factors, which can gather people
under one
group. Music
sometimes can not be able to define culture and is not able to distinguish it from other countries, because of the instruments and the way of comprising a song. I think sports can bring community
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the community
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one
place from various countries who are of different ages
and carry distinct cultural values. For example
, in this
modern ,time nation know about plenty of sports like popular sports like football, and it is incredibly
impactful than Correct quantifier usage
more incredibly
music
. When play authorities arrange a game in a prices place, then
a big number of people
accumulate together in this
place to watch the match, and the surprising fact is they all are from different cultures. This
is one
of the best ways to know people
and culture each other.
In conclusion, I do not agree with the way of music
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the music
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group from a different
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different ages
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